Hmm, so, so far, talking more about my writing here has been going... well. But, no reason not to do some now, if I have something to share.
I'm working on Chapter 54 now, which has really ballooned past what I'd been hoping for in terms of word count. I would really, truly love to keep the chapter under 10k, heh.
So, in pursuit of that, I've been deleting things! I thought I'd share a couple small snippets that I removed, which are both from The Big Shadow Pokémon Lore Dump part two. Hypno talks a bit about the experience of having been shadowed... where "a bit" is like more than 5,000 words. It's a bit of a problem. Anyway:
"How does Professor Krane's machine work? He told me about it, but it sounded really weird. You danced?"
"Danced?" Hypno tilts her head. "No, nothing like that. It's more... abstract than that, I suppose. The way it's supposed to work is the other pokémon, they have normal emotions, so by being exposed to them, you kind of remember how to feel things, too. Professor Krane likes to say that shadow pokémon have lost the ability to imagine things ever being different. To cure them, you have to show them another sort of life that they could have, whether that's with Celebi or with something else."
"Was there music, though?"
Hypno snorts. "Yes, I suppose there was music. It's a strange sort of virtual reality thing. Hard to describe if you've never been in a PC."
And a second extract from the same conversation, but with differet context. I've written multiple versions of this scene, and a big part of editing is trying to cut them all together into something coherent! This bit was a little too lighthearted for the current version of the scene:
"But you could do cool shadow attacks," you point out.
"I suppose that's true," Hypno says with a genuine smile this time. "There are positives to every situation, I suppose. I think I'll take being able to, oh, I don't know, laugh and experience joy and all those sorts of things over some cool-looking fire, but maybe I'm just boring."
"I do not think anyone who has been shadow can *ever be boring."*
"Well, I'll just have to do my best to prove you wrong about that," Hypno says. She stands up and dusts herself off, taking both her empty bottle and the full one for Noctowl. "Let's get back, then. I'm sure the other two will be missing us."
Just some little snippets for now... We'll see if I can motivate myself to do a more substantive post sometime soon!
