The 'How Do I Describe...?' Series: #02 Weather
It was winter, and it was cold. There was ice on the ground, and snow fell from the sky…
Describing the weather doesn’t have to be bland. Let’s think about new, refreshing ways to show our readers the weather…!
Sometimes, describing the weather can be a good shortcut to summarising the mood or theme of a scene for the reader. This can be called Pathetic Fallacy, where we reflect mood with the weather or nature by giving things that usually cannot show emotion an emotive kind of action.
The wind played with her hair. Sullen clouds cluttered the skies. The sun’s warmth caressed her face.
This doesn’t mean that you have to always reflect sadness with rain, or always reflect happiness with sunshine. If your characters are in a place where certain weather conditions are not common, then think about how you might describe the current weather in a way that would reflect that mood.
If your characters are arguing, for example, then the warmth might be stifling or suffocating, not gentle and refreshing. Grey skies can be oppressive, or they can be a thick blanket that conceals and comforts.
Be as inventive as you like!
I think all of us have at least one of the five senses that we forget about in our writing. Relying too heavily on sight and nothing else is a missed opportunity…!
The idea is to make the world you’re writing come to life and using the five senses, especially for the weather, is a great way to create something a little more three-dimensional than:
‘It was raining and everything was wet’.
Even if the weather is hot and humid, you can still use this one. Sure, the sun doesn’t make any noise and clouds don’t either, but things happen when the sun is out, things that don’t happen when it goes in.
Think about your character’s immediate environment. When the weather is hot and sunny, people tend to be outside, soaking up the rays. I always find that summer (at least here in England) is a lot more active and crowded than the winter. People and animals behave differently too when it’s sunny, so you can definitely describe the sound of people, traffic, insects, etc.
As for the rain, well the sound of it will be different depending on a few things. How heavy is the rain? Is there any wind? Is your character indoors or outside? Are they out in the forest, on the beach or walking busy streets?
When it comes to more ‘silent’ weather types like snow or a sunny winter’s day, focusing on the absence of sound can be just as effective.
The weather has a great effect on the environment and on the air we breathe. After excessive downpours in the summer, the air might smell foisty and damp. Comparatively, rainfall after a long dry spell makes the air feel fresh and smell hydrated.
It also can depend on what environment your character is in as to what kind of smells they might walk into. Forestry and foliage has a very different smell to paved streets and cityscapes. If you don’t have a personal memory to rely on when it comes to recreating the smell of a certain place, then let your imagination take over. Think about what kind of components are in the area you’re describing, and how this might affect smell.
For example, in forested areas, there are all sorts of plants that give off unique and distinct scents. In damp, cool woodland, it’s common for wild garlic and raspberries to grow, whereas in drier climates, you’re more likely to find tobacco plants or frangipani.
Even just knowing a couple of things about the scene you’re writing is better than not relying on any past experience at all.
A good way to indicate the weather without a long spiel about the exact condition of it is to think about describing the behaviour happening around it. If it’s raining heavily, then people will shelter indoors or run through the streets with their coats above their heads. Children might huddle underneath overhangs in the playground at school, or splash in leftover puddles once the downpour has finished.
The clothes your characters wear might also create a good descriptive opportunity. If the clothes they’re wearing are too thick and the sun comes out, then they’re bound to feel uncomfortable. The same can be said for those traversing snowy areas with very little protection on their legs and feet.
Little reminders throughout the text serve to keep the reader in the story, and helps towards setting the scene and creating a sense of realism. If you can talk a little about how the weather affects your character directly, then you’re giving the reader an opportunity to be fully immersed into the story.
When writing a scene, ask yourself all sorts about the weather to get a good idea of how to set the atmosphere with it.
How does the air smell? Foisty? Damp? Fresh? Are the pathways glistening, are there glass beads on the window panes? Do people splash over puddles or trudge through soft, wet mud and grass? Does the rain lash, or does it trickle? Does it drum on the rooftops or splatter with the wind? Is it icy when it hits the skin, or more of a warm, close drenching?
If the sun is out, is it baking or barely reaching its heat to the air? The more you question, the more you’ll have to describe…!
Conversations about the weather don’t have to be boring. Have fun using the weather in your own works…!