Carnage Re-Write Part 6

Part 6/?

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Awesome, so now we just have to re-arrange our plot list into some semblance of order, add anything missing and remove anything extraneous, and boom! We have a plot outline, organized into scenes.

Villains: mayhem Mulligan: shoot frances Villains: in prison/institute Cletus, Shriek: love you/getting moved to another institute convo

Title Card

Eddie & V: movies/games Eddie & Mulligan: "he wants to talk to you" call Venom: hunger (out of chocolate)

Mrs Chen's out too. Friends =/= food intro Settle on sushi (expensive, not satisfying, dead [non-nutritious]) and fries (doesn’t have any of the stuff V needs)

Eddie & Cletus: demands convo Venom: sensory seeking behaviour Eddie: hush V while trying to work

Eddie: be in a hurry V&Eddie: stop mugger Venom: hungry (rebuffed)

Eddie, Anne & Dan: Marriage Convo Eddie: drive recklessly Venom: save them

Eddie & V: jealousy convo Friends =/= food reinforcement Re: Dan

Villains: pine for eachother (jealousy/pining resonance)

Eddie & V: wakeup sequence (first movie parallel) Eddie: experience depression Chickens: intro Venom: experience sensory deprivation, hunger; exhibit sensory-seeking behaviour

V: try to do something nice for Eddie (backfires) Eddie & Venom: breakfast scene Eddie: experience sensory overload

Eddie: be in a hurry, drive recklessly

Cletus: recount backstory Venom: like the sound of the mayhem Cletus: wants message delivered to Frances Venom: likens to wanting to fight for Anne

Venom: hunger (forbidden to leave apartment) Venom: Sensory seeking behaviour Venom: violate boundaries (go for a joyride)

Eddie: experience violated boundaries and consequences for V's actions (callback to Anne in 1st movie) Eddie & Venom: breakup fight

Venom: breakup aftermath, bad decision Venom: party hard Venom: "coming out" and being persecuted euphemisms Venom: do party drugs Venom: experience sensory overload

Venom: break down and discuss Eddie & bad hosts with drunk girls in bathroom while hiding in bathroom from overload Venom: miss Eddie for practical reasons Partygoers: suggest finding a better partner

Venom: find a better host

Eddie: breakup aftermath, bad decision Eddie: do productive writing Chickens: have needs

Eddie: head to Mrs Chen's for chicken advice Eddie: see someone in trouble along the way, get roughed up trying to help someone

Eddie & Mrs Chen: do business Mrs Chen: chickens=venom re:needs

Venom: break Cletus out

Mulligan: call Eddie re: breakout

Eddie: try to do Venom-style investigation without Venom Eddie: miss V for practical reasons Eddie: get arrested for B&E

Eddie: call on a friend

Anne: girlboss, practice law Eddie: get relationship advice Anne: getting Eddie out will take time

Eddie: experience consequences Eddie: experience sensory deprivation Eddie: sensory seeking behaviour Eddie: miss Venom for emotional reasons

Cletus & Venom: joyride Cletus: rescue Frances & other inmates

Villains: party hard, cause mayhem Cletus: experience minor setback Cletus & Carnage: sensory seeking behaviour Cletus: eats a "friend" Venom: Friends=/=Food Venom & Cletus: breakup fight Venom: experience violated boundaries Carnage: born

Venom: experience consequences Venom: get stranded with dying host Venom: call on a friend

Carnage & Cletus: introductions, insta-bond 100% match Frances: Jealous Cletus: proposes to Frances (carnage can come too) Villains: plan wedding guests

Dan: be helpful and unflappable Venom: explain panic & call for help Dan: patch someone up (temp host) Venom: miss Eddie for emotional reasons Venom: get relationship advice Dan: Liken Eddie to chickens re: needs Dan: confirm that he and Anne will still be their friends, Eddie or no Venom: forgive Dan & let go of Anne

Villains: burst into police station Carnage: gets hit by Scream's sonics Carnage: experience sensory overload Cletus: mediate Carnage & Shriek Mulligan: get kidnapped Carnage: smells Eddie Villains: 2 for 1, kidnap Eddie too Leave Anne alive, tell her to get word to V

Dan gets call from Anne

Dan & Venom: meet Anne and Mrs Chen at Church Anne is better host: She-venom She-Venom downs chocolate & chicken & tots from Mrs Chen

She-Venom: enter church Villains: have hostages Carnage: explain motivation re: venom Frances: explain motivation re: mulligan Cletus: explain motivation re: Eddie

Carnage, Shriek, Cletus: start marriage

She-Venom: Objects Venom: wishes to bond with Eddie instead of Anne for this wedding

Villains: bicker Cletus, Shriek, and Carnage: domestic violence Cletus: Protest Frances: realization Carnage: violate boundaries Cletus: experience violated boundaries

Venom & Eddie: notice the villains are unsynched Eddie & Venom: Needs/wants talk while fighting villains Eddie & Venom: Get the upper hand

Villain: Grab a hostage Eddie & Venom: Lose the upper hand

Shriek: turn the tables on Carnage Carnage: experience sensory overload Shriek: fight Carnage for Cletus Villains: Breakup fight

Priest: the villains are like chickens Everyone:??? Priest: They will peck their own flockmates to death at the hint of blood Everyone: ???? Priest: I grew up on a farm

Venom & Eddie: Win fight

Cletus: complain to Eddie that he just wanted to be his friend Venom: Friends =/= food payoff "Friends are not food. … You, however" Cletus: Get eaten

Fight Wrap-Up Eddie & Venom: escape before cops get there Mulligan: buy them some time

Credits Roll

Mid-Credits Scene:

Eddie & Venom unpacking heavy-duty stim toys while discussing their plan to go on a vacation and have some "them" time to figure things out Venom: mention that they have some time now foodwise, since they glutted while in cletus Eddie: verbally accept that he's going to have to compromise some on the foood thing. Venom: verbally accept that Eddie needs quiet time sometimes, and mention some options for what it could do/who it could bond with in the meantime (Or this could be like a list of options on a whiteboard in the bg.)

End--credits scene:

Spider-man sees Venom break Cletus out of prison on cameras, then Eddie escaping from the Church aftermath

End Credits

Heads up: I'm probably going to stop with the outline, but if anyone wants to take it and make an actual fic, or a modified version of the movie script, or anything like that, be my guest! I'd love to see it, I just have too many wips already to actually get into the fic part. :)

Any other suggestions on things to change in this outline?

Regardless, I have at least one more post in this series: my initial re-write burst from right after I woke up, mentioned at the start of this all. I haven't looked at it since starting to write all this up, so we get to see what I've improved on or forgotten about since then.

Hopefully I will be finished @symbruary by May

Part 6/7?

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Carnage Original Design by Mark Bagley

@symbruary this is the one that inspired my Carnage drawing! I mean I had to, just look at her in all her murderous glory.

Last line game! Rules: In a new post, show the last line you wrote (or drew) and tag as many people as there are words (or however many you like).

Thank you @anisecandy for tagging me sweetheart! I love tag games, I'm just a bit slow on the ball sometimes :}

So this WIP was meant for @symbruary Girls night, but I didn't have the spoons to finish it on time. Like, this was such a fun concept, and I love drawing wild freaky symbiote hair, but also. Goddamn.

Me, after finishing Carnage: "Whew, I don't think I'll be drawing symbiote hair in a while now."

My brain: "Hey, let’s put Scream, Mayhem and Agony all together in the next piece!"

Now, there are no words in this besides the title, so I guess I'll just tag some peeps then.

@reaperlight @kitausuret @zoeloveconvers99 @hanaotaku95

Hope you enjoy it!

Carnage Rewrite Part 4

Part 4/?

First / Second / Previous / Next Okay, looks like the consensus is that the institution sucks for Frances and the other inmates both, 0-1-3. Good to know. Also apparently her name is Shriek and not Scream. Sorry about that, my bad.

So, how did the movie go again? Lemme grab a scene-by-scene recap and summarize it.

Ok, that's a lot!

So lemme just...

I'll put the text in the readmore, but skip to "/summary" to skip.

Suffice it to say, it's got just as much trash as it does treasure. But it does give us something to work with!

Next time I'll make a list of storybeats from both the summary and the work we've already done here, and then synthesize them into a working outline.

Part 4/?

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obligatory @symbruary even though it's now march orz

summary

Simplest Venom

I made some Venom t-shirt designs for a silkscreen printing workshop I'm attending. Largely trying for a kind of art nouveau look, and this one is supposed to be the simplest option in case there is not much time. If any of them are something you'd like on a t-shirt yourself, let me know and I'll see what I can do.

Another Venom meme, this time for @symbruary day 23: Symbiotes wearing clothes. That slime sure loves dressing up, huh?

Symbruary Day 14: Girls' Night

donna pov: you're just starting to get a handle on this whole symbiote host thing, finally relaxing, maybe even enjoying each other's company, and some murderous weirdo shows up to terrorize the amusement park...

shriek + red team-up bc I said so. where is cletus? idk, comatose. but what about shriek's, you know, shrieking? it doesn't matter; red is immune now. it's the power of girls' night, baby.

Scream vs Shriek is a great title, you know. very comic book

Symbruary Day 4: Bonds

hybrid. the syms discover the wonders of Boiled Egg. also ft. distressed gelatinous mass

For @symbruary day 12: Symbiotify a non-symbiote character: Agonized Jessie from Team Life Foundation! They would make a great match, actually!

Gotta KILL them all!

Alright I'm FINALLY done with this drawing of everyone's favourite murder gal! It's inspired by the scrapped original concept design for Carnage, and dedicated to @kitausuret and @reaperlight ❤

Also, you know how surgeons wear green clothes to neutralise the visual overload of staring at 50 shades of red for hours on end? Yeah I had to sit next to my houseplants for the same purpose while drawing this.

Oh yeah, right, @symbruary day 15: Free day: Fancy-hairdo Carnage :3 Because I said so. And look at her, she is gorgeous with her hair out!

Aaaaand for @symbruary day 16: Faith, I bring all you true believers a meme of my favourite dumbass in the history of dumbassery.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY KITA!!! 💗💗💗

SymbiOT3 sketch for the amazing @kitausuret! It's inspired by her fic Dust to Dust, go read it if you haven't already because it is absolutely wonderful! Just can't get enough of these idiots being in love 🖤

I guess this can double as a @symbruary contribution as well 🤭 for 24: symbiote ot3, and also 17: regret/apology and 26: yearning/longing/pining, because there is A LOT of that in the sorce material (seriously, go read Dust to Dust, it's freaking splendid!)

Symbruary Day 15: Free Day

The symbiote settles into unexpected domesticity. Felicia Hardy shares a revelation.

It's an itty bitty sequel to my other post. I like them.

@symbruary please enjoy this felt slime for day 15: Free Day.