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Chakotay | Cristóbal Rios | Star Trek | Other stuff | AO3
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i’m so proud of anyone who writes fanfic.   i am immensely proud of anyone who types out stories they want to see for characters that are not their creation, or their property, but that inspire them to delve into a difficult medium with which they likely have little experience or comfort. i have to be proud of that because fanfic is ultimately a thankless line of work. and it is work.  it’s work for people who’re good at writing, trained in it. so imagine how difficult it is for beginners, the impaired, those with even a modicum of self-doubt?  in that way, they are no different from any other author. writing, literature, is an art form with an ugly legacy of snobbery. academics and laymen alike still argue about what sorts of writing should and should not be considered ‘canonical.’  add to that odious environment the level of disdain, apathy, or ignorance most non-fannish people have toward fan works and you have a near-permanent, repugnant shroud of You’re Not Real encompassing the whole endeavor.  a shroud under which, miraculously, fan works are still produced with vigor and regularity, and largely without access to agents or editors who’re paid to polish. just as miraculously, these writers often receive, from their friends and peers and strangers, the sort of praise one associates with bestselling authors.  it’s miraculous because fanfic writers have been obliged to believe, from the moment they set finger to keyboard, that what they are doing is a sideshow. at best, they are hobbyists with some talent but no real standing. at worst, they are self-indulgent amateurs, muddying the waters of a true craft.  like many authors of original work, fanfic writers will never have a millisecond of calculable fame for their efforts. they may step out of their borrowed sandbox and create original work, or they may not, but there is no scenario in which they emerge feeling like an accepted member of a celebrated tradition.  even in the rare instance of pop culture turning its eye on some speck of scintillating fan work, it’s still mocked.  it’s still a sideshow, just with a brighter spotlight. so, yeah, i am proud of anyone who can absorb the reality of all the above…and still write. 

Thank you @bossuary for saying all this. I and I'm sure so many fic writers needed to hear this. ❤

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“Everybody has experienced the defeat of their lives. Nobody has a life that worked out the way they wanted it to work out. We all begin as the hero of our own dramas, in centre stage, and inevitably life moves us out of centre stage, defeats the hero, overturns the plot and the strategy and we’re left on the sidelines, wondering why we no longer have a part, or want a part, in the whole damn thing. So everybody’s experienced this. When it’s presented to us sweetly, the feeling goes from heart to heart and we feel less isolated and we feel part of the great human chain, which is really involved with the recognition of defeat.

— Leonard Cohen on why people enjoy listening to melancholy songs (from a BBC radio interview in 2007)
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If it’s not canon, at least there’s always fanfic.

  1. Byler Will Byers & Mike Wheeler, Stranger Things
  2. Steddie Steve Harrington & Eddie Munson, Stranger Things
  3. Destiel -2 Dean Winchester & Castiel, Supernatural
  4. Blackbonnet Blackbeard & Stede Bonnet, Our Flag Means Death
  5. Ronance Robin Buckley & Nancy Wheeler, Stranger Things
  6. Buddie +2 Evan Buckley & Edmundo Diaz, 9-1-1
  7. Lumity -5 Luz Noceda & Amity Blight, The Owl House
  8. Nandermo Nandor the Relentless & Guillermo de la Cruz, What We Do In The Shadows
  9. Geraskier +11 Geralt of Rivia & Jaskier, The Witcher
  10. Piltover’s Finest Caitlyn Kiramman & Vi, Arcane
  11. Hannigram -1 Hannibal Lecter & Will Graham, Hannibal
  12. Supercorp -5 Kara Danvers & Lena Luthor, Supergirl
  13. Ladynoir +10 Ladybug & Chat Noir, Miraculous: Tales of Ladybug & Cat Noir
  14. Huntlow Hunter & Willow Park, The Owl House
  15. Adrienette +15 Adrien Agreste & Marinette Dupain-Cheng, Miraculous: Tales of Ladybug & Cat Noir
  16. Bakudeku -12 Bakugou Katsuki & Midoriya Izuku, Boku no Hero Academia
  17. Wangxian -3 Lan Wangji & Wei Wuxian, Mo Dao Zu Shi
  18. Ineffable Husbands +8 Aziraphale & Crowley, Good Omens
  19. Symbrock +12 Venom (symbiote) & Eddie Brock, the Marvel universe
  20. Dreamling Dream of the Endless & Hob Gadling, The Sandman
  21. Daemon x Rhaenyra Daemon Targaryen & Rhaenyra Targaryen, House of the Dragon
  22. Marichat +11 Marinette Dupain-Cheng & Chat Noir, Miraculous: Tales of Ladybug & Cat Noir
  23. Tomgreg Tom Wambsgans & Greg Hirsch, Succession
  24. Wolfstar -3 Remus Lupin & Sirius Black, the Harry Potter universe
  25. Patpran Pat & Pran, Bad Buddy
  26. Jayvik Jayce & Viktor, Arcane
  27. Kathony Kate Sharma & Anthony Bridgerton, Bridgerton
  28. Raeda +49 Raine Whispers & Eda Clawthorne, The Owl House
  29. Merthur +7 Merlin & Arthur Pendragon, Merlin
  30. Stucky -19 Steve Rogers & Bucky Barnes, the Marvel universe
  31. Harringrove +37 Steve Harrington & Billy Hargrove, Stranger Things
  32. Lumax Lucas Sinclair & Max Mayfield, Stranger Things
  33. Narumitsu +9 Phoenix Wright & Miles Edgeworth, Ace Attorney
  34. Drarry -12 Draco Malfoy & Harry Potter, the Harry Potter universe
  35. Imodna Imogen Temult & Laudna, Critical Role
  36. Jonmartin -18 Jonathan Sims & Martin Blackwood, The Magnus Archives
  37. Twiyor Loid Forger & Yor Forger, SPY x FAMILY
  38. Catradora -29 Catra & Adora, She-Ra and the Princesses of Power
  39. Elmax Eleven & Max Mayfield, Stranger Things
  40. Hualian +15 Hua Cheng & Xie Lian, Tian Guan Ci Fu
  41. Percabeth +19 Percy Jackson & Annabeth Chase, the Percy Jackson universe
  42. Cockles -15 Misha Collins & Jensen Ackles, actors
  43. Jegulus James Potter & Regulus Black, the Harry Potter universe
  44. Superbat Superman & Batman, the DC Universe
  45. Villaneve Villanelle & Eve Polastri, Killing Eve
  46. Nick x Charlie Nick Nelson & Charlie Spring, Heartstopper
  47. Solangelo -6 Will Solace & Nico di Angelo, the Percy Jackson universe
  48. Dreamnotfound -43 Dreamwastaken & GeorgeNotFound, streamers
  49. Satosugu +41 Gojo Satoru & Geto Suguru, Jujutsu Kaisen
  50. Thasmin Thirteenth Doctor & Yasmin Khan, Doctor Who
  51. Drukkari Druig & Makkari, Eternals
  52. Sasunaru +26 Uchiha Sasuke & Uzumaki Naruto, Naruto
  53. Suselle Susie & Noelle, Deltarune
  54. Eddissy Eddie Munson & Chrissy Cunningham, Stranger Things
  55. Sterek -11 Stiles Stilinski & Derek Hale, Teen Wolf
  56. Tarlos -18 TK Strand & Carlos Reyes, 9-1-1: Lone Star
  57. Spirk +14 Spock & James Kirk, Star Trek
  58. Fexi Fez & Lexi Howard, Euphoria
  59. Jopper Joyce Byers & Jim Hopper, Stranger Things
  60. Jikook -45 Park Jimin & Jeon Jungkook, BTS
  61. Chenford +38 Lucy Chen & Tim Bradford, The Rookie
  62. Sambucky -59 Sam Wilson & Bucky Barnes, the Marvel universe
  63. Zukka -47 Zuko & Sokka, Avatar: The Last Airbender
  64. Obikin +36 Obi-Wan Kenobi & Anakin Skywalker, the Star Wars universe
  65. Ladrien +28 Ladybug & Adrien Agreste, Miraculous: Tales of Ladybug & Cat Noir
  66. Dinluke -42 Din Djarin & Luke Skywalker, The Star Wars universe
  67. Bumbleby -50 Yang Xiao Long & Blake Belladonna, RWBY
  68. Shadowgast -33 Caleb Widogast & Essek Thelyss, Critical Role
  69. Sonadow Sonic & Shadow, Sonic the Hedgehog
  70. MileApo Mile Phakphum & Apo Nattawin, Actors
  71. Klance -32 Keith & Lance, Voltron: Legendary Defender
  72. Kanej -38 Kaz Brekker & Inej Ghafa, Shadow and Bone
  73. Yennskier Yennefer of Vengerberg & Jaskier, The Witcher
  74. Sashannarcy Sasha Waybright, Anne Boonchuy & Marcy Wu, Amphibia
  75. Loustat Louis de Pointe du Lac & Lestat de Lioncourt, Interview with the Vampire
  76. Batcat Batman & Catwoman, The Batman
  77. Codywan +7 Commander Cody & Obi-Wan Kenobi, Star Wars: The Clone Wars
  78. Jancy Jonathan Byers & Nancy Wheeler, Stranger Things
  79. Kiribaku -54 Kirishima Eijirou & Bakugou Katsuki, Boku No Hero Academia
  80. Harlivy -11 Harley Quinn & Poison Ivy, the DC Universe
  81. Kinn x Porsche Kinn Theerapanyakul & Porsche Kittisawasd, KinnPorsche
  82. Soukoku Nakahara Chuuya & Dazai Osamu, Bungou Stray Dogs
  83. Jargyle Argyle & Jonathan Byers, Stranger Things
  84. Korrasami -52 Korra & Asami Sato, The Legend of Korra
  85. Stolitz Stolas & Blitzo, Helluva Boss
  86. Damianya Damian Desmond & Anya Forger, SPY x FAMILY
  87. Spideypool Spider-Man & Deadpool, the Marvel universe
  88. Dramione -43 Draco Malfoy & Hermione Granger, the Harry Potter universe
  89. Zutara -61 Zuko & Katara, Avatar: The Last Airbender
  90. Mileven Mike Wheeler & Eleven, Stranger Things
  91. Marcanne Marcy Wu & Anne Boonchuy, Amphibia
  92. Zelink -55 Zelda & Link, The Legend of Zelda
  93. Sasharcy Sasha Waybright & Marcy Wu, Amphibia
  94. Griddlehark Gideon Nav & Harrowhark Nonagesimus, The Locked Tomb series
  95. Tomdaya Tom Holland & Zendaya, actors
  96. Johnlock -45 John Watson & Sherlock Holmes, Sherlock
  97. Jily -9 James Potter & Lily Evans, the Harry Potter series
  98. Calliette Calliope Burns & Juliette Fairmont, First Kill
  99. Malex -19 Michael Guerin & Alex Manes, Roswell, New Mexico 
  100. Serirei Serizawa Katsuya & Reigen Arataka, Mob Psycho 100

The number in italics indicates how many spots a ship moved up or down from the previous year. The ones in bold weren’t on the list last year.

Source: fandom
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The 2023 Star Trek Winter Gift Exchange is here!

Q: What is the Star Trek Winter Gift Exchange?

A: This is an anonymous fanworks exchange for any fandom within the Star Trek universe, from The Original Series to Strange New Worlds!

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Voyager should’ve had a baseball episode. Imagine if you will:

• Janeway and Chakotay picking teams. Chakotay picks Tuvok because he once saw him exit a baseball holoprogram and has been keeping this information to himself for the appropriate moment. Beating the Captain in a traditional American game just to annoy her is the appropriate moment

• Janeway picks B’Elanna immediately after that betrayal because she knows B’Elanna will be picturing Chakotay’s face on the ball

• Harry is a great shortstop and is a good contact hitter. He bats leadoff for Janeway

• Ayala is a utility player. Chakotay takes him as quickly as he can

• Tom brags about how good he is. He gets picked last and ends up on Janeway’s team. Chakotay promised her extra coffee for a month from his rations to avoid picking Tom

• Naomi Wildman is the bat girl. The helmet is too big for her and she can barely see but everyone notices her smile

• Tuvok is really good at baseball. It’s only logical to play a sport that humans love, and it turns out that it’s also logical to optimize your technique and master a 112 mph fastball. Vulcans have stronger ligament and muscle structure so his body can handle the strain. He throws a screwball, knucklecurve and a changeup. Harry is the only one to make contact until the fifth inning

• Janeway walks every plate appearance. Chakotay claims it’s because Neelix is too scared to call strikes, but it’s really because Tuvok can’t bring himself to strike out his friend

• Neelix is the home plate ump. He does not know what balls and strikes are but won’t let anyone explain

• Seven knows everything there is to know about baseball but refuses to play. The Borg assimilated a baseball player once but they were so annoying that Seven will never acknowledge that she knows anything about the sport. She keeps score. Later, every player will be anonymously sent a scouting report

• Chakotay is a power hitter and plays third base. He secretly loves baseball even if he’s doing this to mess with Janeway. He hits two home runs off Tom

• Tom strikes out every at-bat. He doesn’t even make contact. He misses worse and worse every time. He’s been drinking the postgame beers in the dugout. After Harry steals home, he showers him in beer

• The Doctor caught Neelix making a big batch of cracker jacks when three ensigns end up in sickbay. He makes him stop and then when he finds out about the baseball game, he makes himself an umpire

• The Doctor sings during the seventh-inning stretch. He goes on for an hour. Everyone (minus Tuvok) has opened up the beers

• B’Elanna hits the game-winning single past Chakotay. She never lets him forget it about even after they return to earth. She thinks he threw the game to make Janeway happy

• Years later Chakotay tells her he actually pulled a muscle in the third inning and that’s why he missed the ball. She asks the EMH to confirm. He does. She still doesn’t believe it

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thinking about how in ancient times, at least people knew that the lives their children would lead would….vaguely resemble their own???

People have always fondly reminisced about The Good Old Days and complained about Kids These Days, of course. But—and I cannot stress this enough—when my mom was born the Internet did not exist.

like I’m thinking about how I am a college student and during the pandemic, work, education, and relationships have been almost totally dependent on a network of technology that literally did not exist when my parents were college students.

When my mom was in college, she just wouldn’t have been capable of predicting what college would be like for me. I took a full semester of college from 5 hours away because I can virtually attend class through a pocket sized device that projects my image and voice into a shared virtual classroom where I can interact with my professor and other students. I wrote research papers without physical access to a library because I could read my college library’s books on my computer.

If you’re a Mesopotamian farmer, hitching his oxen to a plow, like…idk, man. I can’t picture myself at 40. I feel like a Mesopotamian farmer, trying to imagine his sons riding John Deeres.

It’s so persistently portrayed as this eternal, cyclical thing: Get a job, buy a house, get married and have kids, save for their college, send them off to college. This is the cycle of life. 2.5 kids, buy a house, have a steady career. Just as your father before you did, and his father before him.

Except they didn’t. His father before him didn’t do this, and your son will not live like you. This is not enshrined in tradition. This is not life. This is not how things are, or have been, or how they ever been. Look at it. This beautiful, ageless world of saving for your kids’ college and paying off mortgages and nuclear families. There is no way of life to pass down to your children, no tradition, nothing your father gave you that you can give to your son! You were born into a world that is unintelligible and inaccessible to the children you wanted to inherit it, and you and your children will both die in a world that is as foreign to you both!

I don’t envy the Boomer generation, nor do I have some kind of conceited disdain for them for not being able to adapt to now. So, so much of what defines our lives happened for the first time in their lifetime, and the absence of those things cannot be explained to us. Do you remember what it was like before television? Well…what is “it?”

It’s like our generation’s dim memory of childhood before Internet, and the vast, panicky knowledge that our childhoods were mostly full of a quality best described as the absence of internet, and there is no way to transmit that idea to the kids of today or explain it. We remember it, so, so clearly. It was real. But it’s gone. Annihilated.

There’s a midrash that before he died, Moses was worried about what would become of the Israelite people after he was gone. God brought him forward in time to the schoolhouse of Rabbi Akiva. Moses listened to the discussion but could not understand a thing, and nearly despaired, until he heard a student ask Akiva, “how did you arrive at this conclusion?” Akiva responded, “it follows from what Moses taught.” Reassured, Moses returned to his own time and died.

I taught this midrash last week to a class of about ten 3rd-8th graders whom I have been teaching since September and have never met in person. I asked them to continue the midrash: if Moses made a second stop in 2021, what would confuse him, and what would reassure him?

The youngest kids had a fantastic time imagining Moses trying to use an iPad, trying to understand that he was in a classroom, that we were doing remotely what he had seen Akiva do in person. The older kids wondered if he would be astonished at our level of literacy, or our coed learning.

When I asked what would reassure him they were momentarily stumped: it wasn’t the first time this group has struggled to identify positives about their lives and experiences, except in a guilty “some people have it worse” kind of way. I reminded them of what reassured Moses in the schoolhouse of Akiva: knowing that what he taught had evolved from rather than superseded the traditions of our ancestors. “Who are we learning about right this very minute?” I prompted.

One of them acted it out: Moses peering suspiciously at his iPad, then exclaiming, “They’re learning my Torah in there!” We are not unmoored, we are evolving. It is easier to see the changes than the things that remain constant, but I think there is value, whatever your cultural tradition, in asking “what would reassure my ancestors?”

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“The children are using this vast, incomprehensible magical network to mock that damned Ea-Nasir and his terrible copper. Good.”

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i love to think about how my ipad holds vastly more knowledge than was available to sumerians in 2000 bce, but if one of them saw me scribble away on it with my stylus, they would know what it is! from 4000 years across history, they would recognize this object if they saw me use it! and maybe they’d say ‘you know, we use something like this where i’m from’. and i’d say ‘i know. in school we learn that you invented them.’ and in a weird, convoluted, wonderful and very comforting sense, they invented my ipad too.

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I feel like Chakotay was going through some stuff in One Small Step that the show decided to just not address in favor of just becoming another Seven episode

My dude was lamenting never having time to persue his own interests because one greater cause or another was always demanding his service. He talked about leaving the ship to investigate this anomaly. He put Tom and Seven in danger and disobeyed repeated orders from Janeway (which historically he only does with a real good reason and a lot of after-the-fact guilt) to let the module go and instead of unpacking any of that the episode became about Seven connecting with humanity for the four hundred and twentieth time in less than 100 episodes. He doesn’t even get a chance to explain himself the episode just trails off like it got embarrassed that it tried to do anything with him.

Good use of screen time folks.

Everything you need for Chakotay character development exists in Voyager but then the show gets distracted by something shiny and changes the subject every time I’m so mad.

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It has just occurred to me that of all the characters in Winnie the Pooh, the only ones that lack both fingerless stuffing hands and faint seam lines (the indications that someone is a stuffed animal) are Rabbit and Owl. Which carries the possible implication that Rabbit and Owl are just a normal rabbit and owl living with a bunch of sentient stuffed animals.

And somehow this makes Rabbit’s constant consternation with all of his neighbors even funnier to me.

Theyre also the only ones with bushy eyebrows and chest and chin floof, and I dont know if thats relevant but it FEELS relevant! Also someone mentioned Gopher too and OF COURSE, there is absolutely no argument that this whistling little man isn’t just an average (talking) gopher.

The more I examine this the more it feels just so OBVIOUS

You are exactly right! Most of the characters in the stories are based on the real Christopher Robin Milne’s stuffed toys except for Rabbit and Owl who were added for the books and Gopher who is exclusive to the Disney adaptations.

Here are the real Pooh, Tigger, Piglet, Kanga, and Eeyore. They currently live at the New York Public Library.

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It’s fairly clear in the book illustrations too:

‘Owl,’ said Rabbit shortly, ‘you and I have brains. The others have fluff. If there is any thinking to be done in this Forest – and when I say thinking I mean thinking – you and I must do it.’
Milne, A. A.; E. H. Shepard. The House at Pooh Corner (pp. 78-79). Egmont UK Ltd. Kindle Edition.

This post has been getting a surge of attention and let me tell you that 1) I am really pleased at how kind most of the people who KNEW all this have been in explaining it, and 2) I feel a lot better seeing just how many other people didn’t have any more clue of this than I did XD It’s kinda nice being part of a post thats spreading some fun knowledge in a nice way!

Also thank you to the gracious @roofermadness in the tags for complimenting my astuteness on figuring this out from the animation character designs, you are so nice to say so and I appreciate you 🥰

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put your number (0-20) in the tags!!!!!! i think i got 14!!

anyone who comments that finding ways to enjoy the brief time we have on this bitch of an earth is cringey will be blocked ^_^ <3

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Giving Quality, Motivating Feedback

A guest post by @shealynn88!

The new writer in your writing group just sent out their latest story and it’s...not exciting. You know it needs work, but you’re not sure why, or where they should focus.

This is the blog post for you!

Before we get started, it’s important to note that this post isn’t aimed at people doing paid editing work. In the professional world, there are developmental editors, line editors, and copy editors, who all have a different focus. That is not what we’re covering here. Today, we want to help you informally give quality, detailed, encouraging feedback to your fellow writers.

The Unwritten Rules

Everyone seems to have a different understanding of what it means to beta, edit, or give feedback on a piece, so it’s best to be on the same page with your writer before you get started.

Think about what type of work you’re willing and able to do, how much time you have, and how much emotional labor you’re willing to take on. Then talk to your writer about their expectations.

Responsibilities as an editor/beta may include:

  1. Know what the author’s expectation is and don’t overstep. Different people in different stages of writing are looking for, and will need, different types of support. It’s important to know what pieces of the story they want feedback on. If they tell you they don’t want feedback on dialogue, don’t give them feedback on dialogue. Since many terms are ambiguous or misunderstood, it may help you to use the list of story components in the next section to come to an agreement with your writer on what you’ll review.
  2. Don’t offer expertise you don’t have. If your friend needs advice on their horse book and you know nothing about horses, be clear that your read through will not include any horse fact checking. Don’t offer grammar advice if you’re not good at grammar. It doesn’t mean you shouldn’t give feedback on things you do notice, but don’t misrepresent yourself, and understand your own limits.
  3. Give positive and constructive feedback. It is important for a writer to know when something is working well. Don’t skimp on specific positive feedback — this is how you keep writers motivated. On the other hand, giving constructive feedback indicates where there are issues. Be specific on what you’re seeing and why it’s an issue. It can be hard for someone to improve if they don’t understand what’s wrong.
  4. Be clear about your timing and availability, and provide updates if either changes. Typically, you’ll be doing this for free, as you’re able to fit it in your schedule. But it can be nerve wracking to hand your writing over for feedback and then hear nothing. For everyone’s sanity, keep the writer up to date on your expected timeline and let them know if you’re delayed for some reason. If you cannot complete the project for them, let them know. This could be for any reason — needing to withdraw, whatever the cause, is valid! It could be because working with the writer is tough, you don’t enjoy the story, life got tough, you got tired, etc. All of that is fine; just let them know that you won’t be able to continue working on the project.
  5. Be honest if there are story aspects you can’t be objective about. Nearly all of your feedback is going to be personal opinion. There are some story elements that will evoke strong personal feelings. They can be tropes, styles, specific characterizations, or squicks. In these cases, ask the writer to get another opinion on that particular aspect, or, if you really want to continue, find similar published content to review and see if you can get a better sense of how other writers have handled it.
  6. Don’t get personal. Your feedback should talk about the characters, the narrator, the plotline, the sentence structure, or other aspects of the story. Avoid making ‘you’ statements or judgements, suggested or explicit, in your feedback. Unless you’re looking at grammar or spelling, most of the feedback you’ll have will be your opinion. Don’t present it as fact.

Your expectations of the writer/friend/group member you are working with may include:

  1. Being gracious in accepting feedback. A writer may provide explanations for an issue you noticed or seek to discuss your suggestions. However, if they constantly argue with you, that may be an indicator to step back.
  2. Being responsible for emotional reactions to getting feedback. While getting feedback can be hard on the ego and self esteem, that is something the writer needs to work on themselves. While you can provide reassurance and do emotional labor if you’re comfortable, it is also very reasonable to step back if the writer isn’t ready to do that work.
  3. Making the final choice regarding changes to the work. The writer should have a degree of confidence in accepting or rejecting your feedback based on their own sense of the story. While they may consult you on this, the onus is on them to make changes that preserve the core of the story they want to tell.

Some people aren’t ready for feedback, even though they’re seeking it. You’re not signing up to be a psychologist, a best friend, or an emotional support editor. You can let people know in advance that these are your expectations, or you can just keep them in mind for your own mental health. As stated above, you can always step back from a project, and if writers aren’t able to follow these few guidelines, it might be a good time to do that. (It’s also worth making sure that, as a writer, you’re able to give these things to your beta/editor.)

Specificity is Key

One of the hardest things in editing is pinning down the ‘whys’ of unexciting work, so let’s split the writing into several components and talk about evaluations you can make for each one.

You can also give this list to your writer ahead of time as a checklist, to see which things they want your feedback on.

Generally, your goal is going to be to help people improve incrementally. Each story they write should be better than the previous one, so you don’t need to go through every component for every story you edit. Generally, I wouldn’t suggest more than 3 editing rounds on any single story that isn’t intended for publication. Think of the ‘many pots’ theory — people who are honing their craft will improve more quickly by writing a lot of stories instead of incessantly polishing one.

With this in mind, try addressing issues in the order below, from general to precise. It doesn’t make sense to critique grammar and sentence structure if the plot isn’t solid, and it can be very hard on a writer to get feedback on all these components at once. If a piece is an early or rough draft, try evaluating no more than four components at a time, and give specific feedback on what does and doesn’t work, and why.

High Level Components

Character arc/motivation:

  • Does each character have a unique voice, or do they all sound the same?
  • In dialogue, are character voices preserved? Do they make vocabulary and sentence-structure choices that fit with how they’re being portrayed?
  • Does each character have specific motivations and focuses that are theirs alone?
  • Does each character move through the plot naturally, or do they seem to be shoehorned/railroaded into situations or decisions for the sake of the plot? Be specific about which character actions work and which don’t. Tell the writer what you see as their motivation/arc and why—and point out specific lines that indicate that motivation to you.
  • Does each character's motivation seem to come naturally from your knowledge of them?
  • Are you invested (either positively or negatively) in the characters? If not, why not? Is it that they have nothing in common with you? Do you not understand where they’re coming from? Are they too perfect or too unsympathetic?

Theme:

It’s a good idea to summarize the story and its moral from your point of view and provide that insight to the writer. This can help them understand if the points they were trying to make come through. The theme should tie in closely with the character arcs. If not, provide detailed feedback on where it does and doesn’t tie in.

Plot Structure:

For most issues with plot structure, you can narrow them down to pacing, characterization, logical progression, or unsatisfying resolution. Be specific about the issues you see and, when things are working well, point that out, too.

  • Is there conflict that interests you? Does it feel real?
  • Is there a climax? Do you feel drawn into it?
  • Do the plot points feel like logical steps within the story?
  • Is the resolution tied to the characters and their growth? Typically this will feel more real and relevant and satisfying than something you could never have seen coming.
  • Is the end satisfying? If not, is it because you felt the end sooner and the story kept going? Is it because too many threads were left unresolved? Is it just a matter of that last sentence or two being lackluster?

Point Of View:

  • Is the point of view clear and consistent?
  • Is the writing style and structure consistent with that point of view? For example, if a writer is working in first person or close third person, the style of the writing should reflect the way the character thinks. This extends to grammar, sentence structure, general vocabulary and profanity outside of the dialogue.
  • If there is head hopping (where the point of view changes from chapter to chapter or section to section), is it clear in the first few sentences whose point of view you’re now in? Chapter headers can be helpful, but it should be clear using structural, emotional, and stylistic changes that you’re with a new character now.
  • Are all five senses engaged? Does the character in question interact with their environment in realistic, consistent ways that reflect how people actually interact with the world?
  • Sometimes the point of view can feel odd if it’s too consistent. Humans don’t typically think logically and linearly all the time, so being in someone’s head may sometimes be contradictory or illogical. If it’s too straightforward, it might not ‘feel’ real.

Be specific about the areas that don’t work and break them down based on the questions above.

Pacing:

  • Does the story jump around, leaving you confused about what took place when?
  • Do some scenes move quickly where others drag, and does that make sense within the story?
  • If pacing isn’t working, often it’s about the level of detail or the sentence structure. Provide detailed feedback about what you care about in a given scene to help a writer focus in.

Setting:

  • Is the setting clear and specific? Writing with specific place details is typically more rooted, interesting, and unique. If you find the setting vague and/or uninteresting and/or irrelevant, you might suggest replacing vague references — ‘favorite band’, ‘coffee shop on the corner’, ‘the office building’ — with specific names to ground the setting and make it feel more real.
  • It might also be a lack of specific detail in a scene that provides context beyond the characters themselves. Provide specific suggestions of what you feel like you’re missing. Is it in a specific scene, or throughout the story? Are there scenes that work well within the story, where others feel less grounded? Why?

Low Level Components

Flow/Sentence Structure:

  • Sentence length and paragraph length should vary. The flow should feel natural.
  • When finding yourself ‘sticking’ on certain sentences, provide specific feedback on why they aren’t working. Examples are rhythm, vocabulary, subject matter (maybe something is off topic), ‘action’ vs ‘explanation’, passive vs. active voice.

Style/Vocabulary:

  • Writing style should be consistent with the story — flowery prose works well for mythic or historical pieces and stories that use that type of language are typically slower moving. Quick action and short sentences are a better fit for murder mysteries, suspense, or modern, lighter fiction.
  • Style should be consistent within the story — it may vary slightly to show how quickly action is happening, but you shouldn’t feel like you’re reading two different stories.

SPAG (Spelling and Grammar):

  • Consider spelling and grammar in the context of the point of view, style and location of the story (eg, England vs. America vs. Australia).
  • If a point of view typically uses incorrect grammar, a SPAG check will include making sure that it doesn’t suddenly fall into perfect grammar for a while. In this case, consistency is going to be important to the story feeling authentic.

Word Count Requirements:

If the story has been written for a project, bang, anthology, zine, or other format that involves a required word count minimum or maximum, and the story is significantly over or under the aimed-for word count (30% or more/less), it may not make sense to go through larger edits until the sizing is closer to requirements. But, as a general rule, I’d say word count is one of the last things to worry about.

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The best thing we can do for another writer is to keep them writing. Every single person will improve if they keep going. Encouragement is the most important feedback of all.

I hope this has helped you think about how you provide feedback. Let us know if you have other tips or tricks! This works best as a collaborative process where we all can support one another!

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